Room 6's target writers have been working on six sentence narratives based on their own superhero.
This was the criteria for their writing:
Here are some of the finished stories. Read the stories and then post a comment on the blog to give them feedback on the writing.
Remember to refer to the criteria in your feedback or comment on any other language features that you noticed.
Six Sentence Superhero by Taylor
Once
upon a time there was a mysterious superhero called Night Wing, who could
breathe under water.
Night
Wing lived in a cave in the depths of the tropical ocean and to get there you
needed to give a magic password.
He
could glide off buildings and shapeshift other objects, including people.
One
day his underwater cave was burgled by two super villains and they stole his
freeze ray, his prized possession.
He
was furious and heartbroken at the same time.
So
he rang his friend Night Rider who came as quick as he could so they searched
until they found them and then bashed them and got the freeze ray back.
Six Sentence Superhero by Minnie
Once
upon a time there was a night-out superhero who flew around at night looking
for children who couldn’t sleep so that she could sprinkle diamond spray over
them and send them off to sleep.
She
lived far, far away in a diamond castle where no one would find her.
Her
name was Starry but you could not see her during the day because she only came
out at night.
Her
problem was that if she went out in the sunlight she would go blind.
She
felt unincluded so she was a lonely superhero.
Starry
invited people when she went out and then every Saturday night they had a party
so she was never alone again.
Six Sentence Superhero by Joshua
Once
upon a time there lived an invisible superhero called Night Rider, who was good
at fighting.
Night
Rider lived in an underwater cave in the Antarctic Ocean.
Night
Rider was famous for fighting bad people and catching robbers.
He
was sad because he was lonely in his underwater cave.
Night
Rider was the saddest superhero in the world and the loneliest.
He
thought and thought and then decided to use his super power to get whatever he
wanted and he was never lonely again.