Tuesday, 18 March 2014

                House Day
                 by Tom

"Go! Go! Cool cars roaring. I was cheering for SHEZ IT.
 I liked the relay because Ben and I were the fastest.
I was really excited because we had icecream sundaes and I got the best colour jelly because I got yellow because yellow is the best house team.
I had a lot of fun when it was House Day.
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5 comments:

  1. Mrs. Palfrey18 March 2014 at 23:52

    I like how you hooked in the reader with your interesting beginning and included personal voice so we know how you were feeling about House day.

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  2. Georgia22 March 2014 at 20:58

    I like your story.

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  3. Charlotte23 March 2014 at 14:45

    Good spelling Tom cool story

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  4. ETHAN25 March 2014 at 17:57

    I love your story tom

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  5. ALEX28 March 2014 at 20:23

    Good story tom BECAUSE IT`S AWESOME COOL!

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